Cormac @ Drummond School
I am a student at Drummond School. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Tuesday 22 May 2018
Wednesday 25 October 2017
Pet day writing
For pet day we had to create a small description describing our pets, can you guess what mine is?
Pet description
Deep brown eyes look deep into your soul. Small droopy ears cascade over her small head. A oval like body only brings back the pain of her partners death. A thick straight tail, always wagging. Four skinny legs with paws at the end of them. As far as cuteness goes she is one of a kind. Straight blonde streaks coat her large body. To us she is not just a pet she is a member of our family. Thick strands of blonde fur streak across her body. A tiny ring of brown sit delicately around her neck. As soon as you see her chubby underbelly she’s no longer a vicious animal but an excellent pet. Short thin stripes of brown hiding amongst the blonde. Muculent drool covers her red tongue.
A deep growl erupts when the small pot bellied beast attacks. Its ear piercing whimper acts as a white flag for their kind, symbolic of her ability to surrender. An angry snarl is heard when a brawl takes place. The slobbery sneeze sprays muculent saliva everywhere. Claws sounding like high heels on concrete.
A joyous wag of her brown tail reflects her caring personality. She lets out a protective bark every time a bike or pedestrian. She’s treated like a queen -not even moving a finger. But all in all she is the best pet ever and we love her .
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Tuesday 19 September 2017
Survival Island
Survivor Island
On Monday we had a Survivor Island It was a soggy day. After we crashed on our Islands. (A patch of grass with shark infested spray paint around us) The criteria was to build a TeePee that our teams of Castaways could all fit in and could last a tsunami. ( being shook and a bucket of water being chucked on us) As well as one of our ‘teammates’ being injured we had to bandage them up and build a stretcher and carry them to the other side of the field, and run back. We had to create a lunch for all of our team mates to ‘enjoy’ - aka chargrilled sausages…. It was really cool.
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Thursday 14 September 2017
Friday 1 September 2017
Thursday 31 August 2017
character description
For this past week we have made character description we had to choose either a person we know in real life or a character from our novel for our third novel study we had to write about their face, skin, actions and personality.
Her shimmering blonde hairs sat neatly in a ponytail. It swayed whenever she ran.
Her pale face reflects the glow from her hair. Two friendly blue eyes always gently gazed at me.A bright smile emerged at least 20 times a day. She always sat perfectly upright, like she had been raised in a really posh private school. Her joy was so huge that at any moment you would think her smile would explode.
Miss De Wolde’s white skin shone like snow in the daylight. Her face was covered in makeup on. Her shiny nose piercing stood out like a single tree in an empty paddock.
She loved to talk about her farm and about how she was named after a peculiar thing. I remember that she was named after a cow!
She often spoke of her home country and how all the houses squeezed together not much like New Zealand. Miss De Wolde had an enthusiastic voice. She was a very friendly teacher and everybody liked her.She always laughed when someone has done something wrong and could never really punish us properly!
Her athleticism was only the tip of the iceberg - who knew that she was also smart, friendly and a great teacher. The victim of loads of blonde jokes. Her enthusiasm for PE was unimaginable she played multiple sports she got into the CSC first 15 women's rugby team. She was here from 6:00 am to 5:00 pm.
She excelled in everything she tried with us. We didn’t know what we had until we lost her. To Heddon Bush.
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Thursday 10 August 2017
Prose Piece
I am learning to write a piece of prose a sketch with detailed words, about a particular PERSON , that is very important to me to do this we had to create an ANV chart. Our success criteria was for it to be a story not a list of our ANV.
His personality accepts every challenge like a stride. Dull brown freckles scattered like debris on a destroyed city. Short brown hair always the same every morning. His blood red ears protrude like trees in an open plane. Bony fingers stick out of a rough hand.His kind smile creates happiness in everyone around, and his great jokes never fail to make everyone laugh.
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