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Tuesday 1 August 2017

Novel study

This is a poem about the house in Berlin from the boy in the striped pj's.  I read the book and whatched the movie to help me describe it. I also used an A.N.V chart to describe the scene and the scenario. What do you think?
The House in Berlin was nice Enough.  It had Five floors, a long banister and a big dining room that was filled of memories.A big room with books and colourful toys. A hanging window that could see the whole city.I did what any boy would do I explored giant, expensive house Walking around Berlin with my best friends for life. Playing, laughing listening Doing everything important

8 comments:

  1. Hi Cormac

    I really liked your story. The fault was that some of you words were actually together. What has your favourite part of the book been?

    Carey
    Year6
    Drummond school

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  2. Hi Cormac
    Thanks for posting
    Please add the success criteria so the reader knows what exactly you had to do
    Your 100 WC below needs this too

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    1. Hi Elijah
      No the book is not the same as the movie. There are small things the are not the same like when he drops the sandwich that did not happen instead the family searched for him. later on. The mother went to Berlin and Gretel cries in her room every day. To answer your other Question no he lifts up the fence, because it was not electric.
      Cormac
      Year 6
      Drummond Primary School

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  4. Thanks for posting Cormac
    Like the changes you have made, an interesting piece reflecting clear idea of scene and situation from perspective of character

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  5. hi cormac,

    Have you seen the move? if you have is it the same as the book because in the move he digs a tunnel to get past the fence your next step is put a little less a's in.

    elijah
    room4 y6
    sothland nz

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  6. Hey cormac my name is lauren from yaldhurst model school in christchurch I really like the description of the house it makes me feel like I am there.

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  7. Hi Cormac,

    it sounds like you had a great time in berlin with your friends i have been to shanghai to see my uncle.
    Regards,
    Naua teu.Oamaru Intermediate school.

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